After a botched robbery, two incompetent thieves must avoid the authorities and elude a serial killer who they carjacked.

Carjack

Andrew Bates Penpusher Asked on August 20, 2015 in Public.
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I love it. Would just change the last part – they can’t elude the serial killer if they are all in the same car – maybe just reword this bit.

Leannf411 Penpusher Reviewed on August 25, 2016.
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All good, but one thing – what’s their goal?

Lucius Paisley Logliner Reviewed on August 20, 2015.
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Oh duh! Thanks, updated

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on August 20, 2015.
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From reading this logline, I can only guess that the inciting incident is the carjacking and escaping the authorities is the climax of Act I. Act II would then become the two thieves trying to deal with the serial killer scenario they have now put themselves into. This is the goal to which I was referring…

Lucius Paisley Logliner Reviewed on August 20, 2015.
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Okay, will work on this more. Thank you

Andrew Bates Penpusher Reviewed on August 20, 2015.
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