With tensions rising between settlers and the natives, a sailor must decide between returning to life at sea and staying in the New World to challenge his closest friend for the woman they have both fallen for.

sloanpeterson Samurai Asked on October 2, 2015 in Adventure.
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He’s obviously going to stay and fight for the woman he loves, right?  Otherwise, there’s no story.  So it seems to me that there’s no mystery, no suspense on that plot point.  In that sense, the logline sets up a false choice.

In any event, in most cases a logline is not about a choice that has to be made, but rather about the struggle that ensues AFTER the choice is made.  He wants the woman. What is his game plan for winning her?  As a result of the  romantic competition and the the complications from the natives, what does the sailor do to win her affection?  What heroic feat must he accomplish, what objective goal must he win?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on October 2, 2015.

Thank you, I am rewriting and will repost.  Very helpful.

on October 7, 2015.
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