With the mysterious arrival of a stolen diamond, a forensic investigator goes on a quest to Siberia to uncover a decades-old international crime linked to her lost family

    Corridor One

    corridorone Penpusher Asked on September 1, 2015 in Public.
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      Great points above. Seems like an interesting idea, keep going with it!

      isabel.g Penpusher Reviewed on January 11, 2016.
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        Never describe a main character as ‘the heroine’ – you cant get more generic than that.

        The throughline is unclear – does the protagonist solve the crime or they do they find their long lost family?

        typingfilms Penpusher Reviewed on September 1, 2015.
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          Thank you Change #1

          With the mysterious arrival of a stolen diamond, a forensic investigator goes on a quest to Siberia to uncover a decades-old international crime linked to her family

          corridorone Penpusher Reviewed on September 1, 2015.
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            There is a slight tone difference in her going or being sent. You can take advantage of that. “Quest” can police are a little disjointed. How does the arrival of the diamond connect and trigger her actions?

            This may seem a lot to achieve but it sells the story.

            CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on September 1, 2015.
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