With the mysterious arrival of a stolen diamond, a forensic investigator goes on a quest to Siberia to uncover a decades-old international crime linked to her lost family

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corridorone Penpusher Asked on September 1, 2015 in Public.
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Great points above. Seems like an interesting idea, keep going with it!

isabel.g Penpusher Reviewed on January 11, 2016.
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Never describe a main character as ‘the heroine’ – you cant get more generic than that.

The throughline is unclear – does the protagonist solve the crime or they do they find their long lost family?

typingfilms Penpusher Reviewed on September 1, 2015.
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Thank you Change #1

With the mysterious arrival of a stolen diamond, a forensic investigator goes on a quest to Siberia to uncover a decades-old international crime linked to her family

corridorone Penpusher Reviewed on September 1, 2015.
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There is a slight tone difference in her going or being sent. You can take advantage of that. “Quest” can police are a little disjointed. How does the arrival of the diamond connect and trigger her actions?

This may seem a lot to achieve but it sells the story.

CraigDGriffiths Overlord Reviewed on September 1, 2015.
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I still have a problem seeing a clear and credible cause and effect relationship between the arrival of the diamond and the subsequent quest to Siberia. What is there about the arrival of the stolen diamond that triggers the character to go on the quest? It’s ‘mysterious’ — how can she deduce from an object shrouded in mystery that she’s got to go to Siberia to solve an old crime?

And what’s at stake in solving a decades old crime? What is the urgent import of a past event in the present life of the main character? Why must she solve the crime NOW — or else. Or else what?

dpg Singularity Reviewed on September 2, 2015.
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