RE: After a suicidal client in a rough part of town steals euthanasia drugs, a house-call vet must keep him talking until the police arrive.Singularity Posted 10 hours ago in Drama.
Is this for a short? Doesn’t seem to be substantial enough for a feature film,
And the dramatic situation is unclear. It doesn’t say the suicidal person took the drugs — only that he stole them. So what has incited the crisis? What has created the crisis such that the protagonist must keep him talking?
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- 3 reviews
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RE: Discovering she was only hired to fill a quota, a family-oriented mother bands with other “tokens” to prove her unappreciative boss wrong by winning a big contract for the firm.Singularity Posted 21 hours ago in Comedy.
Richiev makes a valid point about avoiding the trite and tired trope of a white, male, Ivy League educated boss.
However, if the boss is female is she also white? And is the token employee white or…? How does race play into the plot? What is the race/ethnic group of the protagonist (and the other tokens)?
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- 4 reviews
- 2 votes
RE: After she’s dumped in a nursing-home because her family can’t afford her care, a meek grandmother and a motley-crew of exploited residents attempt to steal back enough money from the corrupt facility owners to return home.Singularity Posted 2 days ago in Heist.
>>>. It’s a heist movie,
How so? The money’s off site in bank accounts. Not in a nursing home . What’s there to “heist” in a nursing home? Adult diapers?
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- 7 reviews
- 0 votes
RE: When his best friend dies in a drive by shooting, a naive vagrant must escape the harsh streets of his home world to join the galactic armed forces, endure their harsh training and battle nightmarish aliens to become a space knight.Singularity Posted 2 days ago in SciFi.
Why must he become a space knight? Isn’t that merely a milestone along a path to his ultimate objective goal? Isn’t his ultimate objective goal to avenge the death of his best friend? To develop the skills he needs to defeat the bad guys?
Luke Skywalker accepts Obi-wan’s call to become a Jedi knight not for bragging rights or status. Or to score with women. Or to use a cool light saber.
His objective goal is to avenge the death of his step parents by defeating the evil Empire.
The logline for this story needs to be framed accordingly.
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- 3 reviews
- 0 votes