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A geeky guy in Sweden with a day job in a grocery store.

Been writing/story telling all my life. I've been trying to write screenplays on an off for some time now.

Wrote my first novel during last year's NaNoWriMo and I'm currently editing that. Will probably self publish it through CreateSpace and Smashwords. Title: "Bread For Revolution."
  • Samurai Posted on October 10, 2018 in SciFi.

    Thank you.

    They use word count on the site. During November you input how many words you’ve written so far, and you get to see your progress graphically. I don’t remember exactly, but they recommend you write 1667 words per day, or something thereabout, to make it to precisely 50K words at the end of the month. I usually aim to overshoot, to stay on the “safe” side.

    For structure and planning, I use my take on the Save the Cat! By Blake Snyder. I start by filling out a beat sheet, which I import into Scrivener and then split into separate documents until I end up with 40 of them, and plan what will happen in each scene. I also do some planning in Aeon Timeline.
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  • Samurai Posted on October 9, 2018 in SciFi.

    I’ve made several attempts at a logline for this novel before I posted this one, but they all ended up too long, so I didn’t post them.

    In those attempts, I kept trying to include the marine’s reason for coming to this place for shore leave. When I wrote this version, I forgot to mention it. Another character, a cadet, whom the marine loves was last seen there before he vanished. The marine brings two of his best friends, who are also marines, to search for the cadet, and they’re granted shore leave to do so.
    The setting for this novel is a small town on the capital world of the Trident Coalition. The protagonist and his friends are citizens of the Coalition and serve in the Coalition Marine Corps, while the Cadet is training to become an officer in the Coalition Space Fleet.
    The town is near a famous landmark where there’s an annual regatta, which is just a few days after they arrive.
    I’m not sure if “insurgents” is the right word for the enemies that they encounter. They’re from the planet Humbaba, a world that is often aggressive and tries to invade its neighboring systems. The protagonist and his friends have encountered Humbabans before, as they’re trying to get their hands on a WMD that a rogue officer in the Coalition Military Intelligence developed and tested. (in previous NaNoWriMo novels, I haven’t published any of them, yet.) The Protagonist and his friends were able to stop the rogue officer, and there’s a new guy in charge, but he’s only marginally better than the previous one.
    In this novel, the Humbabans appear to be on the planet, to participate in the race, but that’s just a cover to find the inventor, who created the original blueprints for the WMD and is hiding in the wilderness where they hold the race. The protag discovers, after having found the cadet, that the Humbabans plan to use the race to find and abduct the inventor and make him create the WMD again, for them. So the marines and the cadet enters the race to stop them.
    The local authorities are the Military Intelligence guys, who aren’t very helpful, so that’s why the protag and his friends have to do it themselves.
    Thanks for wishing me luck.
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  • Samurai Posted on August 27, 2018 in Thriller.

    Confronting one’s identity and risk losing oneself, doesn’t sound like something that can be filmed by a camera. Film is a visual medium so,  which makes internal struggles difficult to capture.

    Also, by the sound of things, being marked by the shadow creature sounds like it’s the inciting incident, and being expelled from the town presumably is the Break into Act II? That would mean that Act II, the majority of the movie, would be one man alone in the woods, (or the desert?) having an internal struggle?
    The story would probably work better if the shadow creature were more involved, that after he left town, had to engage in a game of cat and mouse with the creature.
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  • Samurai Posted on June 10, 2018 in Comedy.

    So, they use the machine to see into the future, on how to get rich?

    They use what they’ve learned to get the money, in the manner that they’ve seen, and that is a dishonest way, like theft or fraud, I assume?

    So it’s a bootstrap paradox if I’m right. Nothing wrong with that, just as long as you have thought of the story logic.

    I’m guessing that the money belongs to the gangsters, then? So, if they can see how to get that money, they should be able to see that the gangsters won’t like it, right? But they do it anyway, or they are too hasty when they first use the machine and don’t see that the money belongs to gangsters?
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