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  • Singularity Posted 6 hours ago in Action.

    Agree with Richiev.  Don’t hide the game ball.

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  • Singularity Posted 12 hours ago in Thriller.

    by nature a creature (In this context) is not human, so  you don’t need to tell us creature is inhuman.
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    “Orphaned as a kid, a college student teams with several other orphan victims to hunt down the creature that killed their parents and destroy it.”

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  • Singularity Posted 12 hours ago in Action.

    If the secret is what set’s the story in motion, you should say what it is in the logline for clarity.
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    “When she discovers her deceased father had a double life as a spy, a grieving accountant must flee England with the government only steps behind if she is to  reunited with her Russian homeland.”

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  • Singularity Posted 12 hours ago in War.

    The obstacle of a story or logline should match the goal.

    If the object of the soldiers was to “gain equality,” then facing discrimination would be a great obstacle.

    But I don’t see how it relates to finding their kidnapped members.
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    “When several squad members are kidnapped, a genetically engineered soldier, must infiltrate a highly guarded,  genetic-purity compound to save the captured members.”
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  • Overlord Posted 15 hours ago in Thriller.

    “After discovering he is not the sole orphaned victim of an inhuman creature that took his parents years ago, a college student must piece together how they are connected before the creature strikes again.”

    The inciting incident should be reworded, more specific. How does this event motivate the protagonist to pursue the goal? The rest of the logline is a bit confusing. Piece together how what is connected?

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