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  • Mentor Posted 2 hours ago in Fantasy.

    ciao!

    “After reviving a teenage mummy, an amateur archaeologist must unearth her buried home before the dark curse influences his new friend”

    I’ve been thinking about the stakes…but Jessie dropped in a crucial piece of information. They are friends now! Not right away, but after she’s done being pissed off with him (for disturbing her sleep) she reveals the dark prophecy (maybe midpoint reversal) and he helps her safe return.

    good luck nettle!!

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  • Samurai Posted 3 hours ago in Fantasy.

    I think you’ve got the basics covered. I don’t know what the rules on capitalization are. Feels like something best avoided to me. But better wait for someone more experienced for that.

    Here’s a suggestion:

    After accidentally reviving a benign teenage mummy and dark forces bent on annihilation by converting it,  an inexperienced archaeologist must protect his new friend.

    I suggested inexperience for young , because it could be a nice obstacle for him, if you like it. I also assumed most of the fighting is in protection of the mummy and threw in a relationship.

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  • Singularity Posted 17 hours ago in Comedy.

    What are the stakes?

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  • Samurai Posted 23 hours ago in Drama.

    Quick note. Don’t use actual character names. 🙂

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