RE: A body filled with different personalities, whom are struggling to deal with their own problems whilst trying to protect the woman in their group from the judging nature of todays society.

      LisaLubena Penpusher Posted on January 9, 2019 in Genres.
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        “A body filled with different personalities, whom are struggling to deal with their own problems whilst trying to protect the woman in their group from the judging nature of todays society.” (31 words)

        Here’s my breakdown:

        Inciting incident: None described in logline.
        https://thewritepractice.com/inciting-incident/ —–> I suggest taking a look at this link.

        Protagonist: “A body filled with different personalities,” —-> Confusing. Like Richiev mentioned, describe the protagonist with the condition, not the condition. Such as “a woman with dis associative identity disorder” or even “a woman with multiple personalities”

        Goal: “trying to protect the woman in their group from the judging nature of todays society.” —-> Does not describe a clear, objective goal. How do you protect someone from “the judging nature of today’s society”?

        Antagonist: “today’s society” —-> Is there a specific character/group?

        I suggest looking through the formula tab, and other logline posts and the feedback they receive. This logline is unclear, and lacks elements.

        Summitry Answered on January 11, 2019.
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