RE: A young man with a cursed illness leaves his hometown and embarks on a dangerous journey that will lead him to the healing of the King of a lost city without knowing that his former prince is looking for him to make him a generous offer.
This reads more like a synopsis rather than a logline.
- What does the cursed illness have to do with his dangerous journey and the king?
- What is his actual goal in this story? The healing of the king? Or finding the prince? I dont understand.
- The wording “a generous offer” is too vague. Swap it with something dangerous or surprising like “…without knowing that his former prince is close on his heels.”