RE: Do you think this would work for a limited tv series?

      A family of four has been ripped apart after the father is killed in a mass-shooting. The mother is trying to keep her own shit together while raising a genius high-schooler and an 8-year-old with an eating disorder. At the same time, they are all confronted with their blackness in the face of their town’s police brutality.

      Tina Penpusher Posted on February 12, 2019 in Drama.
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        I like the premise for this. As a logline it could do with trimming down and, as Richiev suggested, clarifying who the antagonists are and what happened in the inciting incident. This is the event that is starting the whole series – it must be clear, concise, and strong enough to sustain a whole series. You definitely have that but you just need a little more clarity.

        I don’t think you need to specify what about the kids makes them unique… kids are tough regardless and in these circumstances it’ll be easy to understand that life is going be hard without adding these to the word count.

        A definable goal is a good way to proceed so the reader feels like there will be finite ending to the series. It just depends what you see that goal being. What is she searching for?

        Hope this helps.

        Summitry Answered on February 12, 2019.
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