RE: The true story of a family man whose congressional testimony—delivered while hooked up to a dialysis machine—leads to landmark legislation making dialysis treatments universally available.Working title: God Committee
While an essential part of the story, I don’t think that his being a family man is essential to the logline.
What may be essential to the logline is incorporating the suggestion that his testimony before Congress was part of a long term strategy of media stunts and provocative actions to dramatize the issue, get media time, prod legislators to act. Because, of course, initially there was no widespread awareness of the issue, and no one outside the community of kidney patients gave a damn.
And for the purposes of the marketing the script, the logline must suggest, must dangle the promise of plenty of interesting conflict scenes and trailer moments throughout the story. His Congressional testimony is just the culmination. Was that, indeed, the case? How long did he fight for the landmark legislation?
Finally, I wonder if it may be more effective to pitch the story as biographical rather than historical, even though the story will only focus on the defining chapter of his life. The biographical tag more implicitly narrows the focus of the script to the struggle of one particular character..