RE: The true story of a family man whose congressional testimony—delivered while hooked up to a dialysis machine—leads to landmark legislation making dialysis treatments universally available. Working title: God Committee

glennpearl Penpusher Asked on March 15, 2019 in Historical.
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Some thoughts:

While an essential part of the story, I don’t think that his being a family man is essential to the logline.

What may be essential to the logline is incorporating the suggestion that his testimony before Congress was part of a long term strategy of media stunts and provocative actions to dramatize the issue, get media time, prod legislators to act.  Because, of course, initially there was no widespread awareness of the issue, and no one outside the community of kidney patients gave a damn.

And for the purposes of the marketing the script, the logline must suggest, must dangle the promise  of plenty of interesting conflict scenes and trailer moments throughout the story.   His Congressional testimony is just the  culmination.  Was that, indeed, the case?  How long did he fight for the landmark legislation?

Finally,  I wonder if it may be more effective to pitch the story as  biographical rather than historical, even though the story will only focus on  the defining chapter of his life.  The biographical tag more implicitly narrows the focus of the script to the struggle of one particular character..

dpg Singularity Reviewed on March 16, 2019.

Welcome back dpg, glad to see  you ‘re still around 🙂

on March 16, 2019.
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