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After discovering that reality is a computer generated prison, a hacker must unleash his own power to save to world.
Stick it in Examples if it's an existing movie. What's standing in his way? It sounds way too easy atm.
Stick it in Examples if it’s an existing movie.
What’s standing in his way? It sounds way too easy atm.
See lessA workaholic founder of a super-successful start-up, who’s reluctantly taken up a 70-year-old as an intern, must decide whether to hire an external CEO in her stead, when faced with overwhelming work-life balance pressures.
Deciding something is not a goal and if you remove the "who's reluctantly taken up a 70-year-old as an intern" bit, the plot is identical - suggesting that it's not actually necessary. BUT of course it is necessary because the film is about him. Based on what I've looked at re: this film (I haven'tRead more
Deciding something is not a goal and if you remove the “who’s reluctantly taken up a 70-year-old as an intern” bit, the plot is identical – suggesting that it’s not actually necessary. BUT of course it is necessary because the film is about him.
Based on what I’ve looked at re: this film (I haven’t seen it) is he actually the protagonist? Or is it a dual protagonist story? Either way, if the film is called “The Intern” then the intern MUST feature heavily in the logline.
Also, the inciting incident – “when faced with overwhelming…” – this isn’t ONE moment. This is a build over time. So what is the one moment that changes things. Is it the arrival of this new intern? Or something that changes in the office when he arrives?
Saying “in her stead” makes it sound like she’s leaving… is she?
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen the other 11 jurors pressure him to convict an 18-year-old accused of murdering his father, a soft-spoken loner must convince them to let go of their biases, question their morals, and save the defendant from the electric chair.
"When a jury of 12 men face reasonable doubt, while deliberating the case of an 18-year-old accused of murdering his father, they must overcome their personal biases and question their own morals." I think this overlooks the hook of the story. There is one man who believes there is reasonable doubtRead more
“When a jury of 12 men face reasonable doubt, while deliberating the case of an 18-year-old accused of murdering his father, they must overcome their personal biases and question their own morals.”
I think this overlooks the hook of the story. There is one man who believes there is reasonable doubt and it is up to him to convince the other 11 that the accused is “not guilty”. There is a clear protagonist in the film, played by Henry Fonda, with a very clear goal, so this logline should most definitely be structured with that in mind.
I also think it’s not essential to know that the accused is an 18-year-old accused of murdering his father. Murder trial yes – and if my memory serves me right it would be a death sentence if convicted – but the age of the accused and his victim… not sure. If anything, I think it would be more interesting to say that he was Puerto Rican as – again if memory serves – his race plays a part in some of the juror’s prejudices.
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