1. Posted: September 12, 2022In:

    Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian, a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi meme, I cannot see the relation between the two sentences in your logline. You wrote: Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian, and a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears. The second part of your logline can be an indeRead more

    Hi meme,

    I cannot see the relation between the two sentences in your logline.
    You wrote:

    Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian,

    and

    a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears.

    The second part of your logline can be an independent logline by itself. Even if it needs more work:
    To conquer her fears, a teenager joins her school’s improv group.
    Use the above logline as a template and re-write if you think this logline serves the purpose.
    But I cannot see the significance of her strained relationship with her sole guardian.
    Can you clarify what do you exactly mean by “Navigating”?

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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  2. Posted: February 19, 2022In:

    After his middle school friends abandon him during the first week of high school, a childish, imaginative teen attempts to win them back with over-the-top fantasy scenarios, but when his best friend and love interest give him an ultimatum, he must either abandon his playfulness or be a loner forever.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi iceisnice, This is how I see the logline, based on my understanding of the story: Confronted by his best friend and the girl he has a crush on, a daydreaming teenager must decide whether to act more maturely or be lonely for the rest of his life. If the above logline describes your story, then usRead more

    Hi iceisnice,
    This is how I see the logline, based on my understanding of the story:

    Confronted by his best friend and the girl he has a crush on, a daydreaming teenager must decide whether to act more maturely or be lonely for the rest of his life.

    If the above logline describes your story, then use it as a template and re-write.

    I hope this helps

    Good Luck

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  3. Posted: August 5, 2022In:

    A shy genius tries to woo an eccentric girl on their Halloween date, only to discover she is a witch with many mysteries.

    Richiev Singularity

    Story is conflict I am not seeing a conflict in the logline. If the lead character came from a long line of witch hunters, there would be a conflict If the witch was an evil witch who planned on eating children, there would be a conflict Where is the conflict? (and by where is the conflict I mean itRead more

    Story is conflict
    I am not seeing a conflict in the logline.
    If the lead character came from a long line of witch hunters, there would be a conflict
    If the witch was an evil witch who planned on eating children, there would be a conflict

    Where is the conflict? (and by where is the conflict I mean it needs to be in the logline)

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