1. Posted: March 23, 2023In:

    After a shadow figure haunts his son, an impulsive man embarks on a journey to his childhood home to reconnect with his violent father and avoid passing on generational trauma.

    Lexington101 Penpusher

    This is good, but what I would like to see cleared up is the ' shadow figure haunts his son' how does this fit into the rest of the story? Does it come back that the father knows who this figure is? Does this figure remind him of the past? At the moment I don't see how it ties into the big picture.

    This is good, but what I would like to see cleared up is the ‘ shadow figure haunts his son’ how does this fit into the rest of the story? Does it come back that the father knows who this figure is? Does this figure remind him of the past? At the moment I don’t see how it ties into the big picture.

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  2. Posted: March 16, 2023In:

    The global rise of demonic possessions brings together five exorcists from different faiths to combat an evil unlike any they have ever encountered.

    Odie Samurai

    Leaning towards: “A global rise of demonic possessions brings together five exorcists from different faiths to save the world from evil incarnate.” Since I don’t know the boss-level evil, whether it will be spiritual or physical (sounds physical based on possessions), I riffed with “incarnate.” I woRead more

    Leaning towards:
    “A global rise of demonic possessions brings together five exorcists from different faiths to save the world from evil incarnate.”

    Since I don’t know the boss-level evil, whether it will be spiritual or physical (sounds physical based on possessions), I riffed with “incarnate.”

    I would love to watch it, make this yours. Take care.

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  3. Posted: September 28, 2022In:

    After having her first same-sex encounter, a young girl is being attacked by a masked killer.

    FilmMaker Penpusher

    It is a bit lacklustre; we're not told much about the young girl; what does her having her first same-sex experience have to do with the rest of the logline? Seems as though it was thrown in there for some sort of plot without thinking it through. It doesn't tell us much, just a generic horror/teenRead more

    It is a bit lacklustre; we’re not told much about the young girl; what does her having her first same-sex experience have to do with the rest of the logline? Seems as though it was thrown in there for some sort of plot without thinking it through. It doesn’t tell us much, just a generic horror/teen movie logline without the personality.

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