Using a detective organization as your lead doesn't draw the reader in. It's impersonal. Instead, you should have a lead character in your logline. Someone to who the reader can attach and want to follow.
Using a detective organization as your lead doesn’t draw the reader in. It’s impersonal.
Instead, you should have a lead character in your logline. Someone to who the reader can attach and want to follow.
I’m missing the "why them" to save the day and not the police and why the parents of this murdered teen have to race against time - are they next? Keep going.
I’m missing the “why them” to save the day and not the police and why the parents of this murdered teen have to race against time – are they next?
Since the sisters are estranged, (Haven't spoken in years) Perhaps one of them is actually a ghost. Either she died and became a ghost. or perhaps the 'being' that lives in the house is impersonating her... it works either way. Or to put it another way, since there are two lead characters being haunRead more
Since the sisters are estranged, (Haven’t spoken in years) Perhaps one of them is actually a ghost.
Either she died and became a ghost. or perhaps the ‘being’ that lives in the house is impersonating her… it works either way.
Or to put it another way, since there are two lead characters being haunted. Perhaps one of them has been the villain the whole time.
Criminal investigator Darryl Blake groups with four detective trainees to gather evidence involving snuff video related crimes taken place at a university. While insisting ASPD student Matthew Efflick may be the culprit, almost little to no evidence can be found to prove it; all while he’s continuing his murderous pursuit.
Richiev
Using a detective organization as your lead doesn't draw the reader in. It's impersonal. Instead, you should have a lead character in your logline. Someone to who the reader can attach and want to follow.
Using a detective organization as your lead doesn’t draw the reader in. It’s impersonal.
Instead, you should have a lead character in your logline. Someone to who the reader can attach and want to follow.
See lessA couple race against time to track down a high school student who murdered their daughter.
Odie
I’m missing the "why them" to save the day and not the police and why the parents of this murdered teen have to race against time - are they next? Keep going.
I’m missing the “why them” to save the day and not the police and why the parents of this murdered teen have to race against time – are they next?
Keep going.
See lessAfter two estranged sisters disregard their mother’s dying wish that they never, under any circumstances, sell the family home, strange occurrences happen as they prepare the house for sale.
Richiev
Since the sisters are estranged, (Haven't spoken in years) Perhaps one of them is actually a ghost. Either she died and became a ghost. or perhaps the 'being' that lives in the house is impersonating her... it works either way. Or to put it another way, since there are two lead characters being haunRead more
Since the sisters are estranged, (Haven’t spoken in years) Perhaps one of them is actually a ghost.
Either she died and became a ghost. or perhaps the ‘being’ that lives in the house is impersonating her… it works either way.
Or to put it another way, since there are two lead characters being haunted. Perhaps one of them has been the villain the whole time.
Just a thought
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