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After an yacht crash, princess Talia ends up living as an giapponese designer and while is looking for answers, she experience a different life.
You should mention the body swap because it isn't clear from the logline. "After her yacht crashes, a Japanese princess switches bodies with a giaponese designer, and must find a way to switch back before..." (Perhaps the lead character was going to be married, so she must switch back before the wedRead more
You should mention the body swap because it isn’t clear from the logline.
“After her yacht crashes, a Japanese princess switches bodies with a giaponese designer, and must find a way to switch back before…”
(Perhaps the lead character was going to be married, so she must switch back before the wedding. A ticking clock would add a little drama)
See lessA reluctant psychic’s near death experience reveals her soul family is trapped in karmic loops; unless she finds the strength to confront her narcissistic mother by using her psychic abilities to uncover their past life mistakes they’ll remain trapped reliving the same life and death experiences for eternity.
reluctant psychic = protagonist near death experience = inciting incident confront her narcissistic mother = story goal + villain remain trapped reliving the same life and death experiences for eternity = story stakes Picked this logline up in the 'Review Needed' section, so lets have a go! Feels liRead more
reluctant psychic = protagonist
near death experience = inciting incident
confront her narcissistic mother = story goal + villain
remain trapped reliving the same life and death experiences for eternity = story stakes
Picked this logline up in the ‘Review Needed’ section, so lets have a go!
Feels like the character arc might be the classic story form of reluctant protagonist transforming into courageous hero. Now, and if this were my logline, I’d review the inciting incident stage. Near death experiences are powerful, but “reveals her soul family is trapped in karmic loops” is not an archetypal experience and difficult for most non-psychics to relate to. Confronting a narcissistic mother, however is archetypal, something audiences may more readily relate to. The missing link, technically speaking, the “Cause and Effect”, that is specifically, what evil act did mother actually do to our poor, struggling hero? To then cause us (the audience) to feel not only sorry for her, but motivate to root for her throughout the rest of the story? Of course it’s your story, but riffing here when I mention Sleeping Beauty. She had a step-mom, who had a henchman try kill her, because, well, who was the most narcissistic of them all … I my opinion, all storytelling is derivative, learn from the great stories of the past. And then add a little psychic dimensionality for originality! 😉
See lessAfter her estranged father’s death, a free-spirited activist must return to her political roots and take her place in her family’s business of corporate law.
From your synopsis, I can see the story world of Century needs your protags voice, but I’m not seeing this reflected in the logline. Find words that describe the arc of the corporation and community that align with her goal or heighten her dilemma.
From your synopsis, I can see the story world of Century needs your protags voice, but I’m not seeing this reflected in the logline. Find words that describe the arc of the corporation and community that align with her goal or heighten her dilemma.
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