1969. While a family ‘s listening to the television that says the words: One small step for a man one giant leap for mankind, a misterious figure in a space suit steps in their house to tell them the truth about the moon landing.

    cesare88 Penpusher Asked on February 12, 2018 in Horror.
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      The logline sets up a situation, an inciting incident for a plot.  But it is incomplete.  It needs to tag a specific protagonist, a lead character.  And it needs to equip him with an objective goal.  So:

      Who is the protagonist?

      As a result of this event, what becomes his objective goal?  What MUST he do about this epiphany?

      dpg Singularity Reviewed on February 12, 2018.
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        I agree with dpg, he makes some very good points.

        Along with what he said, why is this news important to the lead character? (And why would the lead character even believe it)
        What I mean is, I have friends who have told me that the moon landing was fake, I shrug my shoulders and move on. (I’m not really big on conspiracy theories)
        There was even a movie that about a ‘fake’ moon landing.
        So why is this news life changing to the lead character?

        Richiev Singularity Reviewed on February 12, 2018.
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          Thanks for the tips

          cesare88 Penpusher Reviewed on February 12, 2018.
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            Agreed with DPG and Richiev.

            Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar for more information about basic logline construction.

            Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on February 12, 2018.

            The ‘formula’ tab and the places it leads to (https://thestorydepartment.com) are really useful

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