After an OCD-afflicted introvert finally gets a chance at true love with an inspiring woman who sees past her condition, jealousy over a casual friendship forces her to face the latent insecurities that threaten her chances.
What does “face the latent insecurities that threaten her chances” look like on screen? Film is a visual medium and it’s really important to consider what people will be watching on screen. Consider a goal that represents her facing her latent insecurities – for example a shy introvert could have a goal of presenting her idea in front of 2000 people.
The OCD affliction actually becomes somewhat irrelevant towards the end. Jealousy over a casual friendship could be an issue in any relationship so, while the OCD makes her a more interesting character, it doesn’t actually make a lot of difference to the story. In my mind, there isn’t really anything about this story that is any different from anyone else finding a potential lover – it’s always fraught with anxieties and doubts – so why is the audience going to want to watch these two? I think the issue that threatens the relationship needs to be related to the OCD.
Hope this helps.
Perhaps re-writing, being more specific about “gets and chance” and “latent insecurities,” would better convey your story. As it stands, I sort of want to see the film.
I know that you are exploring OCD and relationships, but wondering if you leave it up to the film to show your audience how this person struggles. So maybe experiment with writing a logline without even mentioning OCD.
The story idea actually does sound intriguing, especially is your not dealing with the subject matter in a (overly) comedic way.
Best wishes for success!
I understand the comments here – it doesn’t seem the OCD gets in the way of romance but the jealousy does. Counting to 10 during times of high stress does not seem to be overly intrusive. Who is she jealous of? An ex-lover, her neighbour? A woman her interest flirts with? How is she inspiring? And if so, how does her partner console her? Try to keep her? Or what does her jealousy cause her to do /say/act?
I agree that there is just that one bit of disconnect to give us a picture of the specific struggle your protagonist has…