A 20 something men’s health magazine writer discovers a beautiful shop door just outside of Chinatown that is sometimes there and sometimes not and shows him something new and completely different every time he opens it but no one else can see it or seems to know anything about it.

    The Illusion of Imagination

    Mentor Posted on August 28, 2015 in Public.
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      I guess I would start with some basic question. Is it integral to the logline that he works for a men’s health magazine? Does it matter that the door is in Chinatown? If not, that frees up some space to add more points of tension that jumpstart the story.
      There is a great line in Secret of My Success: “You’re inside the door, kid. What you do on the other side is up to you?” So the question is what does he do on the other side of the door.
      The logline implied–“no one else can see it”–that he spends time querying people about the door. However, it would seem the point of the story is what he experience through the door. How that changes him? Story in some general way is about change. If we caught of glimpse of how the door might change him, or effect his life, I think this logline would really sing.
      The idea of a door that leads to different places–or a different place every time someone goes through it is intriguing. But I would like a little glimpse as to where the door would go before I bought the ticket.
      Just a thought.

      Penpusher Answered on May 9, 2016.
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        What you have here is a situation – a man finds a door.

        Then what happens?

        Logliner Answered on August 28, 2015.
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          I guess that’s exactly what the mystery of the script is. The door is whatever he needs it to be and sometimes that means not being there at all. It constantly changes from scene to scene. I dont know if that helps or even makes sense haha

          Mentor Answered on August 29, 2015.
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            It makes no sense, there’s no impetus, there’s nothing, there’s no middle or end.

            SOMETHING has to happen before this is even anything.

            Logliner Answered on August 29, 2015.
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              I don’t understand why every film has to have a beginning, middle and end necessarily. Why can’t the film just be as long as the character arcs and it isn’t boring. The only thing I thought was missing was conflict.

              Mentor Answered on August 29, 2015.
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                The value I see of loglines is twofold

                – it helps me work out the essential throughline and beginning, middle, end of an idea. I wont work on a script until I have nailed the logline.

                – it communicates to others (producers, investors, actors) what your story is about.

                The logline you have written doesnt do this. Have you written this script already then?

                Penpusher Answered on August 29, 2015.
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                  >>…as the character arcs and it isn’t boring

                  Implicit in a character arc is change. A character starts out in one state (Beginning), changes as a result of events (Middle), ends up in a different state (End).

                  Singularity Answered on August 29, 2015.
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                    I guess that makes sense when you put it that way, ill try and work on that. It’s just i don’t see this film as a plot driven film but character orientated and a study of the imagination.

                    Mentor Answered on August 29, 2015.
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                      The distinction is a matter of who/what is in the driver’s seat. A character can drive the plot (things happen because of what the character does); the plot can drive the character (things happens and the character has to react). Either way, there’s plot.

                      Singularity Answered on August 29, 2015.
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                        Maybe you can write a masterpiece from this logline, I like arty movies, experimental movies and so on, but I don’t think this kind of movies are conceived and written in a way that can be discussed in a website like this one. You can be a genius, I don’t know if we can see this from your logline (I personally don’t). To write and produce this kind of art films you have to struggle. A lot. Here we discuss craft, not art (in my opinion). From this point of view, your logline lacks the most basic elements. It can be done, but this is not the place.

                        Mentor Answered on September 3, 2015.
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