A closeted, sultry actress and a depressed, overachieving high school senior begrudgingly form a bond to overthrow a crazed anarchist bent on strengthening the divide between their two different lifestyles.

    Penpusher Posted on May 29, 2019 in Drama.
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      How does “Strengthening the divide between their two different lifestyles” look on screen?

      Singularity Answered on May 29, 2019.

      The actress has it all – fame, fortune, and a huge fan following.

      The senior has good grades, a social circle of friends determined to get into high-ranking colleges, and the opportunity to be something bigger than himself.

      What the actress doesn’t have is someone to trust with her secret and the fear that she will never be accepted by her followers and friends because of her change.

      What the senior doesn’t have is true happiness outside of his life as an overachieving high school student and a chance to be different by looking past the academics and to see a new life outside of just getting good grades and being the top dog of a group.

      on June 4, 2019.
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        I really like this logline. The descriptions of the two leads are very good! I think ‘begrudgingly form a bond’ could be made to sound more interesting, and you could also add why it is them who has to band together to bring down the anarchist.  The second-half to your logline is really intriguing and has the capacity for great action, drama, and comedy, and makes this a movie I really want to see.

        Samurai Answered on June 2, 2019.
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          NOTE: I intended for this idea to be a mix of comedy, action, and drama with character-driven elements.

          Penpusher Answered on May 29, 2019.
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            Is the actress a lesbian? If not, and you want her to be an introvert, then I’d choose a different way to describe her than ‘closeted’. The second part seems a bit vague at the moment – who is the crazed anarchist, and why does he/she want to divide them more? ‘Join forces’ sounds a bit more active than ‘form a bond’. Also – what brings the two protagonists together, other than a desire to stop someone driving them apart? If they’re already apart, why would they care that the anarchist wants to divide them (if they are already divided)? I’m not sure of the world we’re in at the moment – just a word or two about the setting/world would help.

            Samurai Answered on May 29, 2019.
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              This version of the logline raises more questions that curiosity  in my mind. Like:

              Is this conceived as a movie with dual protagonists?  And what’s the inciting incident that leads the two to bond for a common purpose?

              And what is the anarchist doing, specifically, that creates the wedge issue between them?  And why is he targeting them?

              And what is so wrong with a divide between two lifestyles that it must be narrowed?  That happens all the  time in real life.  What’s at stake if they fail to overthrow him?  Why MUST the divide be narrowed?

              And by definition, anarchists reject power structures, hierarchies — so what is there for the duo to overthrow?  Particularly, when anarchists are the ones who are supposed to be doing the overthrowing.

              fwiw

              Singularity Answered on May 29, 2019.
              1. The movie does involve having dual protagonists.
              2. The “anarchist” is supposed to be a powerful social media blogger who used to have relations with the actress in the past but now wants to use her secret (the actress is a closeted bisexual) to damage her career and reputation to the public.
              3. The divide: The actress has it all – fame, fortune, and following; the senior has good grades, a social circle of friends determined to get into high-ranking colleges, and the opportunity to be something bigger than himself.
                1. What the actress doesn’t have is someone to trust with her secret and the fear that she will never be accepted by her followers and friends because of her change.
                2. What the senior doesn’t have is true happiness outside of his life as an overachieving high school student and a chance to be different by looking past the academics and to see a new life outside of just getting good grades and being the top dog of a group.
              4. My idea for an inciting incident was for the senior to have a dark moment in which he attempts suicide but is rescued by the actress by a close second whilst visiting a part of the city where the senior lives to promote her new movie, they both have a brief conversation until they are stopped short by the blogger (originally “anarchist”) who claims to have caught the actress with someone important to her life (prior to her visiting the city).

              Thanks for the insightful questions as this has helped me look at the logline a little carefully to gain better ideas as to how to make this logline a little more effective.

              on June 4, 2019.
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