A college basketball star jeopardizes his championship hopes as he struggles to rescue his drug-addicted mother while searching for his biological dad.

    Logliner Posted on March 24, 2020 in Drama.

    Hey Richiev,

    Since my screenplay, “A Shot At Faith” is an inspirational/sport feature, what do you think of this version? My script is already written, and has recently drawn the interest of a well-established producer. My screenplay is a “Hoosiers” meets “The Blind Side” type of film.

    Logline: Faith and basketball inspire a forsaken boy to overcome parental abduction, abuse and a changed identity to become a college All-American.

    Best,

    Carl

    www.carllord.com

    on March 29, 2020.
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      I have seen quite a few versions of this logline and I was thinking of how to make it work.

      As written, your lead has three goals, this is why the logline is having a little trouble.

      (1: Save his mother from drugs)

      (2: Find his father)

      (3: Win a national championship)

      but at the same time, your story needs those three goals. That is what the story is about.

      As a result, I think you should turn one of those ‘goals’ into the inciting incident.

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      1: His mother’s overdose causes her to confess to the lead that his father is still alive. (Inciting incident)

      2: This sets the story into motions: The lead characters search for his father. (Goal)

      3: His search might endanger his chances of winning a national championship. (Stakes)

      —–

      Possible twist: Maybe his father is someone he knows, maybe a fan of his basketball team.

      Singularity Answered on March 25, 2020.

      Good points. I’ll see what I can come up with? Thank you!

      on March 25, 2020.
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