Tony ByrdPenpusher Posted: January 14, 20202020-01-14T12:22:31+10:00 2020-01-14T12:22:31+10:00In: Drama After a getting a call from a mysterious stranger, a college student must perform dangerous tasks that would allow him to save his mother who has cancer. – Share Facebook 3 Reviews Voted Oldest Recent Mike Pedley United Kingdom (UK) 66 Loglines 610 Reviews 99 Best Reviews 50,931 Points View Profile Mike Pedley Singularity 2020-01-14T19:15:20+10:00Added an answer on January 14, 2020 at 7:15 pm So what does he do about it? He needs a goal. Why do his dreams turn upside down when his mother dies? I have nothing for context but I don’t understand why it would make any difference. “College student” – As with all of your loglines, give us something more than just “college student” or “young man” or “young couple” etc. Think of it this way: if you had to describe yourself in 2/3 words so that somebody who’s never met you has some understanding about who you really are, what 2/3 words would you use? I can guarantee that, whether you are a college student or not, you would object to simply being called a “college student” and that alone. Aren’t you more than that? 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp Tony Byrd 37 Loglines 74 Reviews 18 Best Reviews 1 Point View Profile Tony Byrd Penpusher 2020-01-15T00:59:00+10:00Added an answer on January 15, 2020 at 12:59 am Yes. I changed it. 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp JayHarrington24 1 Logline 6 Reviews 1 Best Answer 186 Points View Profile JayHarrington24 Logliner 2020-01-15T12:10:16+10:00Added an answer on January 15, 2020 at 12:10 pm As a follow up to 85?s comment, what type of ?tasks? is this college student performing? ?You should describe the tasks in a word or two – are they menial tasks (such as raking leaves/taking out the garbage/painting for the stranger)? Or are they more dangerous in nature – kill someone, find someone, expose something sinister etc.? ?I don?t think you mean that the tasks are menial/routine tasks; so you should qualify ?tasks?. Also, needs a touch more refining – but, a good start. 0 Share Share Share on Facebook Share on Twitter Share on LinkedIn Share on WhatsApp You must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Captcha* Remember Me! Forgot Password?