A con artist spends Christmas with a family he grows to love, but his masquerade is threatened when his ex wife moves in next door.

    Alternate version:

    A con artist hustles a family into spending Christmas with him, but his masquerade is threatened when his real family moves in next door.

    Intention: to live a real life.

    obstacle: his real life.

    I thought I’d try this out.

    I’m trying to put more conflict into the original idea. (Otherwise I might keep the original longline and have his ex wife as a complication/obstacle.)

    Perhaps it begins with him trying to get back into the lives of his ex wife and daughter. They ignore him.

    He finds this surrogate family – all whilst pretending to be someone else. Then his real family moves in next door. Perhaps the new man is a cop (who is onto him?)

    Perhaps he begs his ex wife to join in on the charade. And then one lie leads to another…

     

    Mentor Posted on November 12, 2019 in Family.
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      Any ideas with this or should I stick with the original?

      Mentor Answered on November 12, 2019.
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        Would the ex-wife really be moving house over Christmas? The time period seems very confused – how long did you envisage the film covering?

        It would be great if you could keep updated versions of your loglines within the initial post so readers/commenters can see the evolution of the logline and the related comments.

        Summitry Answered on November 12, 2019.

        I figured the ex-wife moves in with the cop next door. (The cop is onto him from the start.)

        Of course, she reluctantly covers for him – and then one lie leads to another. The daughter also gets involved in the lie…

        I then thought this gets progressively worse when one of his old friends visits him and makes up an even more outrageous lie (like “I’m a millionaire”).

        And of course, it all blows up in his face around Christmas eve.

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          This is the one I’m considering going with:

          A lone wolf con artist seduces a woman by pretending to be someone else, but must first spend Christmas with her family, whom he grows to love.

          It’s simple and basically the film. But I want to lean in on the conflict. Regardless, I think his ex-wife and daughter are definitely a complication to deal with. His real life bleeding into the false one (that he wishes was real).

          Not only that, I thought the setup/opening hook we’ve got him trying to call his estranged ex-wife and daughter – who don’t want to talk to him.

          This leads him to seducing a woman (and basically her family) and getting invited to spend the holidays with them.

           

          Mentor Answered on November 12, 2019.
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            Perhaps it’s better like this…

            A con artist spends Christmas with a family he grows to love, but his masquerade is threatened when he finds out his real family lives next door.

            “Moves in” is doing too much I think.

            Also, I kept in masquerade (it’s doing double time here) so you know he’s hustled them or ya’ know seduced them into it. He is pretending to be someone else but I don’t have time to put it in there.

            Mentor Answered on November 12, 2019.
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