A crush kindled comedienne and a connection delusional fan influence a viral coma recovery star’s search for a tramatized teen
Following the cessation of long-term life support, the creative mind of an abused teen terrorized into a coma, anomalously wakes into viral internet stardom where he relies on a childhood girlfriend, a boyfriend delusional meth addict and pain escallating hallucination for rediscovery
You might have gotten a little too fancy with this one.
1: Not sure what is a “crush kindled comedienne”
2: connection delusional fan… do you mean a stalker?
3: “a viral coma recovery,” again I don’t know what this means
In other words, after reading this logline, I still don’t know what the story is about
I’m with Richiev.
I’m not even sure who the main character is. It seems as though the story is about a person who’s come out of a coma and they’re searching for a teenager – and this person has been influenced by the comedienne and her stalker….
Check out the formula to help with formatting and to understand what a logline is and how it works.
Simple is better in a logline. We don’t need fancy descriptions… we just need something that tells us the story.