Tony ByrdPenpusher Posted: January 14, 20202020-01-14T10:53:13+10:00 2020-01-14T10:53:13+10:00In: SciFiAfter his teenage son is kidnapped by gang members, a police officer decides to steal cars.– ShareFacebook3 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentMike Pedley United Kingdom (UK) 66 Loglines 616 Reviews 99 Best Reviews 50,948 Points View Profile Mike Pedley Singularity 2020-01-14T19:20:27+10:00Added an answer on January 14, 2020 at 7:20 pm Why would a gang want to kidnap a boy with leukaemia?Why will doing a car robbery rescue his son?Why does he need to team up with all of these people? It doesn’t take 5 people to rob one car.Why does he have to be a cyborg hunter when nothing else about the plot has anything to do with cyborgs?These are questions that should be answered within the logline.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 61 Loglines 3,389 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,369 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2020-01-14T21:38:37+10:00Added an answer on January 14, 2020 at 9:38 pm I have to agree with Mike, the lead character’s son is kidnapped and he decides to steal some cars.If this is the plot, you will have to show us how those two things connect.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 61 Loglines 3,389 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,369 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2020-01-14T21:47:28+10:00Added an answer on January 14, 2020 at 9:47 pm Think of Lord of the rings.“When an evil sorcerer threatens to enslave the entire world, a humble Hobbit decides to go on a trip.”Now if I hadn’t read the books but was just reading the logline, I would be scratching my head in confusion. How does going on a trip stop an evil sorcerer?The reason it’s confusing is that it’s missing why going on the trip is important,? (to destroy the ring which happens to be the power base for the evil sorcerer)In your logline, his son gets kidnapped, so the lead steals some cars… obviously, something is missing from the logline, How does this all connect.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?