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A disgraced coach gets a second chance but must teach couch potato kids about baseball and life to win a championship trophy, a trophy wife, and the apple of his eye.

A disgraced coach gets a second chance but must teach couch potato kids about baseball and life to win a championship trophy, a trophy wife, and the apple of his eye.
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    1. Grumpy

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      This feels a little unfocused. Perhaps rearrange it terms of goals and obstacles – A disgraced coach gets a second chance at success and love, but first they must deal with couch potato kid players, stiff competition, etc.

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    2. RandyG

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      Aren’t you giving away the ending??? Maybe say “as he pursues” or “in pursuit of” a championship trophy, etc.

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