An ex convict must rescue his granddaughter from sex traffickers who might be a part of a prostitution ring.

    Penpusher Posted on April 1, 2020 in Action.
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      I’d get rid of the “who might be a part of a prostitution ring” part.

      INTENTION: rescue his granddaughter.
      OBSTACLE: sex traffickers.

      It lacks a hook that separates it from “Taken”.

      How about…

      –  An escaped convict must rescue his granddaughter from the same sex traffickers, whom he inadvertently helped to break free. (I’m not sure if the hook/twist is strong enough here.)

      –  When his granddaughter is taken by sex traffickers, a convict, a former FBI agent, is given 24 hrs to find the men responsible. (We’ve got a ticking clock/deadline.)

      –  When his granddaughter is taken by sex traffickers, an ex-con returns to his old ways to find the men responsible. (Very tired and cliche.)

      – An ex-con must return to prison and kill a criminal mastermind or else sex traffickers will kill his granddaughter.

      (This is similar to BRAWL IN CELL BLOCK 99. Which may I add, is a pretty cool film ha.)

      Admittedly, none of these have that strong hook – but I’m spit balling.

      Good luck!

      Mentor Answered on April 1, 2020.
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        The structure should represent, the Main Character, an Event and his Action in response to that Event.

        This is a standard formula which works in almost every case.

        Samurai Answered on April 1, 2020.
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