crushingstarLogliner Posted: September 8, 20192019-09-08T06:34:42+10:00 2019-09-08T06:34:42+10:00In: HorrorA family of four moves into a house in a small town only to find out the house takes people when it takes one of the children. the family has to do all they can to save their child.– ShareFacebook4 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentRichiev 61 Loglines 3,389 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,369 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2019-09-08T13:18:41+10:00Added an answer on September 8, 2019 at 1:18 pm “When their new house eats her son, a scared mother must traverse though the evil dwelling discovering it’s secrets in order to save her child and escape the house.”0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppyqwertz 2 Loglines 108 Reviews 31 Best Reviews 5,069 Points View Profile yqwertz Mentor 2019-09-08T18:52:21+10:00Added an answer on September 8, 2019 at 6:52 pm Both the original logline and Riciev’s suggestion fit the screenplay for “Poltergeist” by Steven Spielberg.The motto to keep in mind is “The same thing, but different”. Being similar to Poltergeist means your story has a ready audience, now tell us what is different.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppgiannisggeorgiou 12 Loglines 130 Reviews 17 Best Reviews 4,741 Points View Profile giannisggeorgiou Samurai 2019-09-08T21:55:34+10:00Added an answer on September 8, 2019 at 9:55 pm Like the previous version with “sucking people alive,” the “taking people” does not have a clear meaning. Wouldn’t it be better if you specifically stated what the family sees? Does the child disappear in a locked room? Does the child simply disappear? Then you will have to say “when the child disappears in their new home…”I agree with the Poltergeist argument, too.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppmrliteral 0 Loglines 141 Reviews 10 Best Reviews 2,610 Points View Profile mrliteral Samurai 2019-09-09T03:06:38+10:00Added an answer on September 9, 2019 at 3:06 am A family of four may be main characters but they’re not a protagonist; single someone out and define them in some way. Make it clear what happens, what the stakes are, what has to be done, and do it in one sentence.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?