“A guilt-ridden hunter must protect his family from a murderous gang when he accidentally kills their leader’s daughter.”
After accidentally killing a drug lord’s daughter, a guilt-ridden hunter must protect his family from the gangster’s rage.
Start with the inciting event and with the goal.
The biggest problem with this logline is that there’s no definitive end to the story. As it’s not clear what protecting the family entails, we don’t understand what the action is and how long it goes for. For a week, a month, a year? And how does he protect them? Fending off assassination attempts, killing the gangster?