– A hypochondriac TV host on the brink of failure must confront his troubled past when the only way to save his show is to go on a road trip with his estranged biological sister to find their birth mother.

Penpusher Posted on May 18, 2019 in Family.
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Why? What happens that causes ‘the road trip’. How does the road trip relate to saving his show?

 

“When he discovers he needs a liver transplant, a hypochondriac host must…”

Singularity Answered on May 18, 2019.
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I don’t see the logical cause-and-effect chain between his floundering TV show and the quest. Why is the success of his TV show contingent on his finding his birth mother?    Why must his biological sister accompany him? And how does his hypochondria into  it?  And why should an audience want to care whether his TV show succeeds or fails?

Singularity Answered on May 19, 2019.
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Thanks for the reviews and questions, y’all!

The reason why finding his birth mom is the only way to save is show is that his show is about estranged family members coming together (so every episode he has new guests that want to be reunited to family members), and the producers of his show want him to do a reality tv show about his own estranged family coming together and reuniting. The reason for the road trip is that his sister needs a kidney transplant.

I don’t know how to incorporate all this information in a short logline. The logline shouldn’t explain the entire movie I think, but maybe I should incorporate more information…

As far as “And why should an audience want to care whether his TV show succeeds or fails?” – that question could be applied to any movie, so I don’t understand it, really. The audience cares cause the main character cares. Why would an audience care about any character in any movie at all, then?

 

Penpusher Answered on May 19, 2019.
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Thanks for the reviews and questions, y’all!

The reason why finding his birth mom is the only way to save is show is that his show is about estranged family members coming together (so every episode he has new guests that want to be reunited to family members), and the producers of his show want him to do a reality tv show about his own estranged family coming together and reuniting. The reason for the road trip is that his sister needs a kidney transplant.

I don’t know how to incorporate all this information in a short logline. The logline shouldn’t explain the entire movie I think, but maybe I should incorporate more information…

As far as “And why should an audience want to care whether his TV show succeeds or fails?” – that question could be applied to any movie, so I don’t understand it, really. The audience cares cause the main character cares. Why would an audience care about any character in any movie at all, then?

 

Penpusher Answered on May 19, 2019.
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Bibi:

Thanks for the clarifications.

Pumping up the ratings is a selfish act. Saving his sister isn’t.  So why doesn’t he donate a kidney? It’s a can’t-lose, three-for-one winner. 1] It saves her life; 2] It would end their estrangement; 3] It would boost ratings (arguably more so than finding his birth mom).

How will finding his birth mom save his sister? It seems like a separate goal. What is the primary objective goal that drives the plot?

>>>The audience cares cause the main character cares
and because the protagonist cares for something that’s worth caring about. Saving his sister is worth caring about. Pumping up his ratings, not so much.

>>> the producers of his show want him to do a reality tv show about his own estranged family coming together and reuniting.
Well, then, it’s the producers’ goal — he doesn’t own it. It’s better if the protagonist owns his objective goal, particularly if he undertakes it in spite of what others say, not because of it.

fwiw

Singularity Answered on May 19, 2019.

Thanks dpg for taking the time to write this! ! very much appreciated.

you have guessed exactly what happens in the story: by the end, he decides to give his own kidney to his sister. But at the beginning, he is reluctant to do so because he is a hypochondriac and a selfish man, so instead he proposes to go on a trip to find their bio mom, who could donate her the kidney (this trip also benefits him because of the tv show like I explained above). When the bio mom plan doesn’t pan out (the bio mom has dementia and doesn’t remember them), then he decides to give her the kidney. So by the end, he overcomes his hypochondria and his selfishness to do a selfless act for his estranged sister.

 

I think though that what you are saying (the goals are a bit blurry and unclear) is valid. Maybe my premise is a bit too convoluted. And I agree with you re the point you’ve made about the goal not being his but the producers’.

 

 

 

thanks!

on May 19, 2019.
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Bibi:
Thanks for the further clarifications.

Stripping (butchering?) the plot down to its spine, it seems to me that the guy’s objective goal is to find his birth mother and persuade her to donate a kidney donor for his sister, something he can’t bring himself to do because of his hypochondria.

Singularity Answered on May 20, 2019.
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I would only suggest that you break it up into two sentences. It’s a bit of a mouthful to get out on an elevator. How about:

A hypochondriac TV host is on the brink of failure. The only way for him to salvage his ratings is to confront his past and go on a road trip with his estranged biological sister to find their birth mother.

 

Penpusher Answered on May 20, 2019.

Devil’s Advocate: If the logline is long enough for two sentences, then the logline is too long.

on May 20, 2019.
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I agree with  Richiev.   If a logline has more than one sentence, then the logline is probably too long.

The more measure for me is a logline that exceeds 40 words. (I have yet to encounter a logline for a movie that got made that couldn’t be summarized in 40 words or less.)  That is, a logline should only take 5-6 seconds to read.  And it should make immediate sense.

This logline is 39 words long — almost at the red line.  However, imho, it doesn’t make immediate sense in terms of stating the singular, clearly defined objective goal of the protagonist that drives the action.

Singularity Answered on May 20, 2019.
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