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thedarkhorseSamurai
Asked: May 29, 20202020-05-29T23:31:00+10:00 2020-05-29T23:31:00+10:00In: Thriller

A man is seduced into robbing his lover’s psychotic boyfriend, when he does, they go on the run – but soon question whether they can trust each other.

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    1. CraigDGriffiths

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      CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter craig.griffiths@griffithscreative.com.au
      2020-05-30T09:59:19+10:00Added an answer on May 30, 2020 at 9:59 am

      After helping robbing his lover?s psychotic boyfriend, the couple go on the run to avoid ….. but …… forcing ……..

      What do they want to achieve or avoid?

      What is their goal, preferably in life.

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      2020-06-06T01:54:26+10:00Added an answer on June 6, 2020 at 1:54 am

      Hi Craig,

      My apologies for a late reply.

      I think I need to outline and think it through.

      INTENTION – love/money.

      OBSTACLE – love/money.

      I’d rather have one clear specific goal here. And one clear formidable obstacle.

      The ongoing thing/through-line (?) of love vs money is interesting though.

      My idea was to do something whereby there is constantly suspense – whether that character is after love or money. Perhaps give them a gun with one bullet. The whole thing – just two people on the run, etc.

      Hmm – kind of like TRUE ROMANCE meets THE TREASURE OF SIERRA MADRE.

      That idea doesn’t exactly shine in the above logline.

      Thank you for your thoughts.

      THD

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