A rework of an older logline

    Set against the turmoil of the French Revolution and the Romantic Period, the original feminist Mary Wollstonecraft, fights against society, religion and her family to establish education and rights for women – and to find love.

    Penpusher Posted on October 17, 2018 in Historical.
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      Maybe something like:

      Amidst the French Revolution and the Reign of Terror, the feminist Mary Wollstonecraft broke all the rules of society and religion to fight for women’s rights and for love.
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      Notes:
      I suggest “amidst” rather than “set against”  because it’s stronger and because it’s historically true.  She lived in France, was an eye witness to the violence, the chaos, the guillotining. (So drop the Romantic Period — the French revolution isn’t merely the backdrop, it’s the bait on the story hook.)  

      And it’s also true that she broke all the rules.  (Did she ever!)

      In the standard formula, the “finding love’ would be deleted because loglines are supposed to be only about the “A” story; they are not supposed to include the “B” story — the love story.  But the standard formula is a male convention reflecting how testosterone poisoning distorts male consciousness in drama such that typically achievement takes precedence over relationship.  It’s standard operating procedure in films with male protagonists (which is to say most films) that love must be — and will be –sacrificed on the altar of the objective goal. (Until the final act, anyway.)

      However, this is a story reflecting typical female consciousness.  It’s  a story about a most unconventional woman who truly did try to have both a career and true love — who juggled both aspirations concurrently.

      The dominant male power players in show business are utterly clueless about Mary Wollstonecraft.  But not the women who  in the era of the #MeToo movement are storming the barricades,  opening up new opportunities for themselves and new opportunities for stories like this to (finally!) get told.  For them, Wollstonecraft is an iconic feminist hero.  The time is ripe for her story to be told.

      Women directors and producers are the obvious target audience for this story.  And they won’t have any problem with a logline that incorporates both the “A” and “B” story lines.  They’ll get it.

      This is a film I want to see made — and to see. Very best wishes with your script!

      Singularity Answered on October 17, 2018.
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        Thank you. Thank you for your feedback and suggestions. Your words, support and enthusiasm are of equal value to me. I agree – she is a story that needs to be told.

        Penpusher Answered on October 17, 2018.
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          Yes, I agree with the revised version suggested above.

          Amidst the French Revolution and the Reign of Terror, the feminist Mary Wollstonecraft broke all the rules of society and religion to fight for women’s rights and for love.

          I actually thought that acceptance would have been a bigger problem than love as not many men could have handled her (assuming it was a man she was after). the only thing I ask is why? What caused her to change? step up? Who was she – a teacher? a scholar? A???? Just gives it more life to someone who does know who she is.

          I’ve never heard of this woman but definitely would like to know more!!

          Samurai Answered on May 11, 2019.
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