A rich, successful doctor with a debilitating sex addiction becomes entangled in kinky and increasingly dangerous power games with his sexy psychiatrist.

thedarkhorse Penpusher Asked 7 days ago in Thriller.
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>>>with a debilitating sex addiction becomes entangled in kinky and increasingly dangerous power games

That’s a complication to the plot.  A complication created by the relationship.  But what is the doctor’s original objective goal that led him to get entangled with the shrink? Or his objective goal in spite of the dangerous entanglement?  Or his objective goal  triggered by the relationship?

And what are the power games really about?  BDSM?  If so, say so because it’s a selling point.

dpg Singularity Reviewed 6 days ago.
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This gets my attention and sounds interesting for a movie concept. According to the rules of writing loglines that I see posted on here though, there is no inciting element listed. I guess there needs to be some kind of event mentioned in the logline that begins this conflict. I hope that makes sense.

writecrosswords Penpusher Reviewed 6 days ago.
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Thank you for the feedback everyone.

What do you think of this one?

When a sex addict meets a woman he loves and is unable to have sex with her, he reconnects with his sexy former psychiatrist, with whom he shares a volatile history with, to get to the bottom of his addiction.

I wasn’t sure whether to use “kinky” instead of “volatile”. Also, do you think I need “with whom he shares a volatile history with”? Is it too much?

thedarkhorse Penpusher Reviewed 4 days ago.
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