evad97Penpusher Posted: July 31, 20192019-07-31T01:20:17+10:00 2019-07-31T01:20:17+10:00In: Coming of AgeA shy adolescent is forced to question her identity when she and a mysterious new friend are chased across the states by a vengeful Police Officer.– ShareFacebook3 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentyqwertz 2 Loglines 108 Reviews 31 Best Reviews 5,069 Points View Profile yqwertz Mentor 2019-07-31T01:54:33+10:00Added an answer on July 31, 2019 at 1:54 am If a “vengeful police officer” is chasing her “mysterious new friend” shouldn’t she question her friend’s identity, not her own?Once a police officer crosses an administrative district (county line, state line) he is out of jurisdiction and can no longer make an arrest unless he is in hot pursuit. If the officer has a reason for pursuing the pair, then put it in the logline. If the officer is not in hot pursuit, then the pair can go to the next police station and have the officer arrested – problem solved.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppdpg 105 Loglines 5,521 Reviews 557 Best Reviews 112,081 Points View Profile dpg Singularity 2019-07-31T03:48:07+10:00Added an answer on July 31, 2019 at 3:48 am Yqwertz is correct on the technical point of the officer’s jurisdictional boundary.Also, why is the adolescents ID in question as a result of being chased by law enforcement?? I can guess what the problem with her ID is, but a logline shouldn’t leave me guessing on an important element in the plot.“Also forced to question”? is not an specific objective goal.? It’s a plot problem.? What is her objective goal?? What must? she because she’s being pursued over something about her identity?? Check out the guidelines under “Our Formula” for how to build an industry standard logline.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 62 Loglines 3,399 Reviews 303 Best Reviews 81,544 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2019-07-31T10:55:18+10:00Added an answer on July 31, 2019 at 10:55 am What is the vengeful police officer, seeking vengeance for? Does the lead character know why the police officer wants vengeance?0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?