A successful, married spends a night with a woman during a business trip, only to wake up mugged, a few days later the woman is a candidate in a job interview conducted by him and his wife.

    Penpusher Posted 6 days ago in Thriller.
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      I saw the comments but still don’t understand the story. It seems the wife is actually your protagonist and has set him up, but then what? She’s already successfully nailed her cheating husband. What’s next? Where’s the continuing conflict?

      Samurai Answered 6 days ago.
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        As Richiev has pointed out, this is the setup – we need to know what the guy’s goal is. Or if the wife is the protagonist what her goal is. As setups go it’s an interesting one though!

        Is this a short? I can see this working well as a 15min film or so but I struggle to see it lasting longer than that as it currently stands. As soon as the job interview starts, there’s very limited places it can go.

        I’d recommend watching a film called Diaboliques. Great (French) film and has a similar(ish) premise.

        If the wife is trying to prove the husband is unfaithful I think it would be better to make her the protagonist. It would be difficult for the audience to get behind this guy whatever his goal is – cos chances are his goal is to get off the hook.

        Why does the woman mug him by the way? I’m not sure this is necessary both in the story but most definitely not in the logline. The mugging doesn’t change anything really – unless I’m missing something.

        Hope this helps.

        Overlord Answered 6 days ago.
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          >>We later learn that the wife and the woman are working together. She needed to prove that his husband is unfaithful

          Well, she’s proved that in the 1st act.  Now what?  What’s the plot that follows from that setup?  And who is in the driver seat of the plot, the scheming wife or the duped husband?

          Singularity Answered 6 days ago.
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            What’s the conflict throughout this movie? Is the woman-theif now blackmailing the man for a job? What’s the job?

            Samurai Answered 6 days ago.

            We later learn that the wife and the woman are working together. She needed to prove that his husband is unfaithful

            6 days ago.

            This is the family business and the job she’s interviewed is a secretary job.

             

            6 days ago.
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              You have created a situation, the story would be what the husband does when the woman shows up for the interview.

              Singularity Answered 6 days ago.
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