firstname.lastname@example.orgPenpusher Asked: April 30, 20202020-04-30T17:04:25+10:00 2020-04-30T17:04:25+10:00In: DramaA talented lonely man falls in love with his soulmate but everyday fighting brings out her past and his imaginary future.Would love to hear from you what you think of this logline.? ShareFacebook6 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentyqwertz 2 Loglines 108 Reviews 31 Best Reviews 5,072 Points View ProfileBest Answer yqwertz Mentor 2020-04-30T23:26:57+10:00Added an answer on April 30, 2020 at 11:26 pm Its all too vague. What is the man’s talent? How does the talent help or hinder his relationship with his soulmate? Why is he lonely when he sees his soulmate every day? What kind of future does he imagine? What event in her past stands in the way? Finally, why does this bother him today if it didn’t yesterday or last week or last year? What incident kicks the ball rolling?Remember, a logline has to distinguish your film from others, so specifics are your friends.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 64 Loglines 3,558 Reviews 309 Best Reviews 82,056 Points View ProfileBest Answer Richiev Singularity 2020-05-01T01:34:49+10:00Added an answer on May 1, 2020 at 1:34 am What is your lead character’s goal?0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppthommymorais@gmail.com 1 Logline 2 Reviews 2 Best Reviews 51 Points View ProfileBest Answer email@example.com Penpusher 2020-05-01T08:13:59+10:00Added an answer on May 1, 2020 at 8:13 am So i would change talented for passionate. I guess he was lonely before he met her but scared to get back there since they?re fighting a lot. In the story we see the present(love/fighting) but her past his her problem with ex husband who is still in the picture and family trouble coming back with him trying to make her come true with it all. His imaginary future is the life he sees with her. What it could be if they would just fully accept each( because deep down they?re meant for each other). What makes it all happen is yea. The fact that he?s never had this before but knows THIS is the one. So how could I make it better?0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppthommymorais@gmail.com 1 Logline 2 Reviews 2 Best Reviews 51 Points View ProfileBest Answer firstname.lastname@example.org Penpusher 2020-05-01T08:17:17+10:00Added an answer on May 1, 2020 at 8:17 am It might help if explain you that the movie. Goes from seeing the present to seeing the imaginary future back and forth up until the end when you realize that she never went true and left him0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppNeer Shelter 23 Loglines 2,803 Reviews 258 Best Reviews 55,452 Points View ProfileBest Answer Neer Shelter Singularity 2020-05-02T12:05:14+10:00Added an answer on May 2, 2020 at 12:05 pm Your explanations of the plot aren’t describing the specifics a logline needs. In short, all you need to know if a story has the fundamental components to function well are a main character (man), an inciting event (missing), and a goal (also missing).Man (even a talented and lonely one) is a vague description of a character. Firstly, “…man…” describes half the human race. Secondly, “…talented…” means nothing unless we know what he is talented in and how this will affect his story (see, for example, David Helfgot’s biopic).? And “…lonely…” describes most people and more so nowadays.What goal MUST he achieve? And why? 0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppHannahB 1 Logline 2 Reviews 2 Best Reviews 51 Points View ProfileBest Answer HannahB Penpusher 2020-06-01T12:03:12+10:00Added an answer on June 1, 2020 at 12:03 pm I’m assuming” her past” means she had a traumatic past? Is that the conflict. Because of her past they can’t achieve the future he has envisaged? If this is the case then maybe it’s her story. She needs to overcome her fears for them to be happy.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?