LtowndanPenpusher Asked: July 21, 20192019-07-21T18:57:20+10:00 2019-07-21T18:57:20+10:00In: AdventureA wannabe activist who aspires to join a larger action group gets a job at a mysterious energy company he believes is involved in illegal activities.– ShareFacebook2 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentdpg 105 Loglines 5,551 Reviews 551 Best Reviews 112,204 Points View Profile dpg Singularity 2019-07-21T21:41:59+10:00Added an answer on July 21, 2019 at 9:41 pm What does he want to be active about?? I’m guessing it has something to do with environmental? issues.? But a logline should not leave a reader guessing what the role of the main character is.? So be specific:? “An environmental activist….”What becomes his objective goal as a result of joining the energy company?? ?What specifically does he want to uncover,? to expose? “Illegal activities” is too general, can cover a wide range of malfeasance.? ?In “Erin Brockovich” the protagonist must prove that a plague of illnesses in a community is the result of the energy utility dumping toxic waste into the groundwater.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppsavinh0 58 Loglines 96 Reviews 8 Best Reviews 3,333 Points View Profile savinh0 Samurai 2019-07-23T03:16:33+10:00Added an answer on July 23, 2019 at 3:16 am Sounds like a promising idea!Just make sure to be more specific in your wording. He needs to have a clear outer goal (want) that is properly described in your logline.And yes, “environmental activist” sounds better than just “activist”, because it gives the reader a clear vision of the main character and his background.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?