A wheelchair-bound girl must learn to use her physical abilities to save herself and friends from a pack of female zombies.
I think this is interesting, and definitely a new take on a zombie film. I have four thoughts on it:
- I have no idea where these zombies came from. Is this a zombie apocalypse? A mishap at a lab? Zombies from Comic-con that happen to be real? It just seems out of the blue. No issue with explaining what the wheel-chair bound girl is doing there. Plenty of girls and disabilities happen, but, zombies don’t really exist so ya might want some backstory.
- Maybe phrase the logline so it includes an inciting incident. What happens that leads up to this attack? When a wheel-chair bound girl discovers that a group of zombies at Comic-con are real, she must use her physical abilities to save herself and her friends.
- I’d like to know a bit more about the wheelchair-bound girl’s mental state/personality with another adjective. I’m guessing you’re going for a character that first needs to believe she can do the things that she needs to do, before she can do them. Maybe “When a despairing wheelchair-bound girl…”
- I have no idea why the zombies being female is important enough to include in the logline, and it’s kind of a weird choice. I’m assuming you have an explanation for it? It might come off as necrophilia or something 🙂
I think your concept is good, the logline, as expressed by Danzig does need a little work
I would say a movie about a woman learning to use her physical abilities seems weird, Maybe she searches youtube, “How to use Physical abilities” then goes to the library and checks out a book on learning physical abilities. After that maybe she takes a class, finally after learning to use her abilities in the third act she saves the day.
Instead, I would focus on what she actually must do.
This is just an example yours would be different:
“When the zombie apocalypse lands smackdab in her small town, a wheelchair-bound radio aficionado and her friends must trek up the local mountain and send out a zombie-killing radio wave in order to save the world from the brain-eating freaks.”