IvyEight6Penpusher Asked: March 9, 20212021-03-09T09:26:53+10:00 2021-03-09T09:26:53+10:00In: HorrorA young couple moves into an apartment only to find out their neighbors are ghosts.Lone House ShareFacebook1 ReviewVotedOldestRecentTomisin Atobatele 8 Loglines 2 Reviews 0 Best Reviews 126 Points View Profile Tomisin Atobatele Logliner 2021-03-09T23:55:02+10:00Added an answer on March 9, 2021 at 11:55 pm Be more specific about what your main characters are going to do about this. This is why a longline is generally the first defence against a weak plot. The way you have it now it seems like your main characters will be very passive. Meaning that they will be getting pushed and pulled by other characters in the story in order to move the plot forward which is very bad. It will make your story very boring you never want passive main characters, you want them to make decisions that push the story forward.Also if they move and they’re neighbours are ghosts what is their motivation to change that or eliminate the ghosts? Maybe they’re being haunted by ghosts from their own past that are forcing them to acknowledge their darkest secrets. Make the ghosts mean something and give your main characters a resal reason to need to get rid of them. Also re structure your longline with the idea that your main characters are the ones hunting the ghosts (for whatever reason you chose) not the other way around0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?