IvyEight6Penpusher Asked: April 21, 20212021-04-21T15:52:28+10:00 2021-04-21T15:52:28+10:00In: FantasyA young man sees his dead girlfriend through near death experiences.Project Butterfly ShareFacebook2 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentRichiev 64 Loglines 3,558 Reviews 309 Best Reviews 82,056 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2021-04-23T20:59:04+10:00Added an answer on April 23, 2021 at 8:59 pm From reading this logline, there doesn’t seem to be a goal, conflict nor plot. I assume that isn’t the case, so you might want to add those elements to the logline.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppvariable 42 Loglines 348 Reviews 51 Best Reviews 18,509 Points View Profile variable Uberwriter 2021-04-22T15:56:01+10:00Added an answer on April 22, 2021 at 3:56 pm In the context of a logline this can be the inciting incident of the film. The premise has potential. His dramatic need to keep seeing his girlfriend can drive him to commit near death experiences. What stops him from doing so will provide the conflict necessary for a good story.So two things. Justifying the dramatic need to keep seeing her (beyond the nature of their relationship), some unfinished business or maybe the dead girlfriend leading him towards her cause of death. This could also lead you to the second thing – what’s stopping him? for instance, in this case, the forces responsible for her death could be preventing him from committing a series of NDEs.Hope this helps.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?