A young man smokes marijuana chronically for a decade despite disapproval from his parents, mainly because he enjoys its numbing and uplifting effects, which helps when you despise the state of the world.

    Samurai Posted on October 20, 2019 in Drama.

    title: POTHEAD

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      The logline sets up a character and a situation, but not a plot.  Suggest running this through the logline generator.

      Singularity Answered on October 21, 2019.
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        What is the result of him smoking marijuana for that long?  What  must he do over the course of the story?  He just sounds like a cantankerous little pothead and I don’t really need to know more until he has something to worry about.

        Samurai Answered on October 21, 2019.

        Yes, he has his cantankerous moments. I’m sure many would if they actually cared about the things they pretend to. Also, being cantankerous in today’s society is totally normal to me, due to the amount of evil in the world and nothing being done about it. I wish more people were cantankerous. The main character worries about the most important issues actually. Such as poverty, homelessness, pollution, and government corruption, and unlike almost every person on the planet he decides to try and make positive changes by running for mayor of his city.

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          Does the lead character, by chance, have a goal?

          Singularity Answered on October 21, 2019.

          He needs to get his rug back?

          on November 8, 2019.

          That could be a good subplot. Although I would make whatever it is he needs back something other than a rug for originality.

          on November 8, 2019.

          His car?

          on November 8, 2019.

          He doesn’t drive. Perhaps a bag of weed? He thinks he had some weed left, and thinks it’s gone missing. He goes into detective mode and checks all the smoking spots in the city, until he smells a familiar strand of bud he has purchased in the past from his dealer. He steals it back, only later to remember he already smoked his stash, and he stole without just cause.

          on November 8, 2019.

          Joking aside, I think considering it’s a drama…

          Perhaps he’s hooked on it because he’s trying to overcome the grief of his sister’s death.

          (Something like that. We need to get specific about why he despises the state of the world.)

          The parents – should be anti-drug. We should push in on that. They could be politicians? Police?

          Henb – write whatever you want. Just know you shouldn’t be neutral or boring. 

          on November 8, 2019.

          I know how stories work. I believe none of my stories are neutral or boring. You can imply that they are all you want. There are plenty of reasons to despise the state of the world, and anyone who doesn’t is evil if you ask me. Most people don’t get hooked on pot because of past trauma, they are usually peer pressured into it, and either they love it or they don’t.

          on November 8, 2019.

          Okay. My apologies.

          Lets focus on the problem as opposed to the solution.

          I mean – what do you think is wrong with your logline? How can we make it better?

          What do you think is missing?  

          on November 8, 2019.

          I feel not much is missing. Though many others will disagree simply because it does not follow a certain formula, which gets tiresome I find, and lessens creativity. The essence of the story is present in my current logline, it does not say exactly what will happen, such as him going into politics, though I feel it captures the lead character’s plight perfectly.

          on November 8, 2019.

          I agree with the formula thing. I think using the same one constantly will inhibit you.

          I use several and see what clicks.

          (But yeah – what works for me won’t necessarily work for you. We’re all different.)

          Also – you could technically go off and write this thing using the logline you posted.

          It’s the marketing one I’d be worried about as we have to be as excited about this thing as you are.

          The marketing logline is usually different anyways – and you’ll have to tweak that a hundred times ha. Speaking from experience.

          But yeah – if you go off and write this thing from this logline and you’re having a hard time – it’s probably because the logline could have been stronger. Tighter.

          A lot of problems innately stem from the logline.

          That’s why we need to get it as great as possible before you get cracking on that script.

          Good luck!

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            As dpg pointed out, this is simply a character and a situation. How will this sustain a 90min+ runtime? What is actually going to happen on screen. As Richiev said, does the character have a goal? So he despises the world… what’s he going to do about it? What is he going to do about his parent’s disapproval? What is the event that kick starts this story?

            As dpg said, try running this through the generator and see what you get.

            Summitry Answered on October 21, 2019.
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              “Without intention and obstacle – it’s journalism.” – I stole that from Aaron Sorkin.

              Lets give him a strong intention and strong obstacle…

              A cynical teen sets out to smoke marijuana nonstop for a decade, antagonising his parents – who are both anti-drug politicians.

               

              Mentor Answered on November 8, 2019.

              His intention is actually to enjoy life to its fullest. The obstacle is the state of the world, which overtime makes his life far less fun. So, he decides to try and fix the world’s problems so that he can go back to enjoying life. I find these devices much stronger than the one you suggested and have the capacity for a worthwhile story with a positive message. His parents are average parents who try to get him to stop smoking weed, and worry greatly about his health. If you like you could write your own script using your logline suggestion.

              on November 8, 2019.

              Okay…

              INTENTION: enjoy life to its fullest.

              OBSTACLE: the state of the world/gritty reality of the world.

              A cynical teen sets out to enjoy life to its fullest, by smoking marijuana nonstop, however his mission is steadily thwarted by the gritty realities of the world.

              “his mission is steadily thwarted” – need to cut this down to one word somehow.

              But that’s basically what you want I think? Tell me if I’m closer?

              on November 8, 2019.

              I wasn’t sure whether to use that other part…

              So, he decides to try and fix the world’s problems so that he can go back to enjoying life.

              A cynical teen sets out to fix the world’s problems so that he can enjoy his marijuana fix.

              Still missing something. I dunno what.

              on November 8, 2019.

              That’s closer, I suppose. Though still not entirely what this story is about. He enjoys life in a few ways, not simply by smoking pot. He also hangs out with friends and does not work a meaningless job selling people over-expensive products. The first half of the script follows the main character in high school and discovering pot, and his parents’s worry for him begins to form over the years. Also, his compassion will increase as times passes. The second half will follow the lead in his mid-twenties, he will start to become more and more afraid of the future, and the way things are currently run. Then he decides to do something about it.

              on November 8, 2019.

              Okay, cool. The latest one I did chopped off “marijuana”. Things like “disillusioned” and “numb” – you should try to encapsulate in one word.

              From what I’ve got thus far…

              A young man, desperately numb, sets out to fix the world’s problems – in order to feel something again.

              I might be wrong again. Anyways – good luck!

              And remember – no matter what anyone says (including me and my big fat mouth) – this thing is uniquely  yours.

              So take what you need.

              Discard the rest.

              Nobody here has all the answers.

               

              on November 8, 2019.

              Thanks!

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                A cynical teen, unable to enjoy his marijuana fix because of the world’s problems, sets out to fix them.

                INTENTION: In order to live life to its fullest (and enjoy his marijuana) he must fix the world’s problems.

                OBSTACLES: The world’s problems.

                Mentor Answered on November 8, 2019.
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                  I’m wondering if the marijuana is even necessary in the logline?

                  Perhaps just…

                  A cynical teen, unable to live life to its fullest because of the world’s problems – sets out to fix them.

                  Tell me what you think?

                   

                  Mentor Answered on November 8, 2019.

                  That’s very good, I like this suggestion. Although, the character will almost always be seen smoking pot, and his addiction often has direct correlation with what goes on in his life. So I would include that he is a stoner.

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                    A young man, desperately numb, sets out to fix the world’s problems – in order to feel something again.

                    (18 words I think? Nice and lean.)

                    Mentor Answered on November 8, 2019.

                    I wouldn’t call him desperately numb, he actually has more feelings than most others.

                    on November 8, 2019.

                    Okay. Hmm. Apathetic maybe?

                    Post your new one when it’s done. I’m curious to know what it looks like now.

                    on November 8, 2019.
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