A young woman plagued with visions of her twin sister by committing and witness murders only to figure out that they are deadly consequences.
This is complete nonsense. The grammar is so terrible I don’t have any idea what the story is. Even if I did I would never read the script, because when the writing is so poor in just this one single sentence, how will an entire screenplay look?
Take the time to think about what you’re trying to convey with the words, and remember that you’re writing a sentence for people who don’t know anything about the story…so you have to make it clear what the script is about.
Give us the protagonist, antagonist, conflict, & stakes, then proofread for clarity and proper grammar.
Tony has received a lot of feedback from tons of people, who have spent considerable time assessing his work. But he doesn’t seem to incorporate any of it in his new loglines. He rarely reviews other people’s loglines, and when he does, he doesn’t give more than “Great! I would watch it” or similar.
He has continued to operate in a spirit that is 100% against that of this website.
As a result, Tony is now banned from the site indefinitely. This has not happened before in the nearly 8 years this site has been running…