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CraigDGriffithsUberwriter
Asked: October 2, 20202020-10-02T13:38:06+10:00 2020-10-02T13:38:06+10:00In: Western

After a long career, a retired sheriff in the old west is forced to defend himself against war crime allegations from the civil war. Dividing the town and discrediting his legacy.

The question is “can you outrun your past?”.

“Is a man measured by his worst action, or his life’s achievements?”

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      2020-10-04T09:41:26+10:00Added an answer on October 4, 2020 at 9:41 am

      Really like this log line. It’s concise and it’s a movie I’d like to see! Truly. Not enough quality westerns. Great job!

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      2020-10-02T22:16:14+10:00Added an answer on October 2, 2020 at 10:16 pm

      I think it’s a solid premise and logline. Here are some minor changes without changing it too much.
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      “After a storied career, a renown sheriff is forced to defend himself against civil war crimes, dividing his town and threatening his legacy.”

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        2020-10-03T09:37:41+10:00Replied to answer on October 3, 2020 at 9:37 am

        Excellent thank you.

        He headed west to hide. Civilisation catches up to him.

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        2020-10-02T22:17:03+10:00Replied to answer on October 2, 2020 at 10:17 pm

        Or perhaps ‘civil war crime accusations’

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      2020-10-03T20:58:05+10:00Added an answer on October 3, 2020 at 8:58 pm

      >>>Whatever side he was on is immaterial really to the story.

      ????

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        2020-10-04T15:29:20+10:00Replied to answer on October 4, 2020 at 3:29 pm

        The reason is it triggers a story, it is not the story. We could make him a royalist in Ireland or a Germany after WW2 now living in France.

        Is a person their worst action or a total of all their actions? That is the story.

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      2020-10-03T12:13:58+10:00Added an answer on October 3, 2020 at 12:13 pm

      I love this logline.

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        2020-10-03T15:30:21+10:00Replied to answer on October 3, 2020 at 3:30 pm

        Thank you. I have had this story bouncing in my head for years. Finally felt I was ready to start writing it.

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      2020-10-03T05:21:20+10:00Added an answer on October 3, 2020 at 5:21 am

      After all these years, why NOW? That is, what is the inciting incident that dredges up the dark episode in his past?

      What side did he fight on, the Union or the Confederacy?

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        2020-10-03T09:36:27+10:00Replied to answer on October 3, 2020 at 9:36 am

        After the end of the Civil War some states carried out actions against former soldiers.

        Whatever side he was on is immaterial really to the story.

        Yes he was guilty. Some people defend him be saying “he was ordered”, while others take the high ground. A bit like the time when people would openly critique Vietnam vets.

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