After abandoning his family, a reclusive fugitive must come out of hiding in order to save his son, who has been kidnapped by his vengeful ex-partner in crime.
Quick fix up:
After his ex-partner in crime kidnaps his son, a reclusive fugitive must hunt down the hideout to save his boy’s life.
Start with the inciting event then describe the MC and goal. In this instance, the action seems unclear. What is the MC going to do in order to save his son?