After finding photographs of them taken while they slept, a honeymooning couple must uncover the truth behind the photographer’s identity hidden in the portraits of previous guests of the holiday home before they become just another picture on the wall.

    Summitry Posted on June 22, 2018 in Horror.

    New idea and first draft of the logline. Possibly a bit vague and potentially should have a single protagonist but I’m just floating it for now.

    on June 22, 2018.
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      It’s not clear as to who the main character is, but the bigger issue is the why?

      Why do they have to “uncover the truth behind the photographer’s identity”?

      Why don’t they call the police? Why don’t they leave the holiday home? How do they know that the photos of the previous couples means that they will die? Is it supernatural?

      Samurai Answered on June 23, 2018.
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        Apart from [ establishing how they know….that if they don’t hunt down the photographer, they’ll die ], It’s an idea worth working on 🙂

        Another take, to EDIT tidbits from —
        “After discovering their photographs (on a wall of deceased/in the obituary??), a newlywed must unearth the responsible cameraman (or join his victims)”

        Good Luck mikepedley85!!

        Summitry Answered on June 22, 2018.
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          Are they sexy photos? Is the movie stakes “embarrassment”?  How do they know to look for clues in portraits? Before they become another picture on the same walls where those portraits are? If so, where are they? If they’re in public, then they must not be sexy, and the embarrassment stakes are gone, and it’s fine if they’re up there. If they’re in private, nobody else will see them, and the embarrassment stakes are almost gone, and it’s basically fine if they stay up there. Also, this is a drama or at most a thriller, but not a horror, not as presented. And “become JUST another picture” sounds stakes-y but isn’t, because I’m pretty sure you’re not suggesting that if they don’t figure out who’s taking the pictures they’ll literally become a picture?

          Samurai Answered on June 28, 2018.

          After finding the photographs (which are just of them sleeping in bed taken on their digital camera) they realise that someone is in the holiday home with them. After this they find themselves trapped inside and that’s when the photographs on the walls start changing and they notice that the people trapped inside the photographs are trying to send them a message as to the photographer’s identity. If they don’t find the picture of the photograph which is somewhere in the house and stick it back in it’s place on the wall, they’ll be trapped inside a photographer forever. I fully appreciate that all of that is not entirely clear from the logline but I’ve been working on the plot for this one in a bid to make the logline better. Still a work in progress but your comments are incredibly useful as they’ve highlighted a few other things I need to address (in the logline).

          on June 28, 2018.

          WOW, yeah I did not get at all that the people in the pic are changing! So it’s straight up supernatural, is what you’re saying, and they actually WILL become/be trapped in a picture. Well… yeah I’d say give yourself a break and come back to this after you’ve got a really solid outline, like a 20-page motha where you really know everything that happens. Just my 2 cents. 🙂

          on June 29, 2018.
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