Cleopatra
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After her first love dies, a taxi driver on her way to sign divorce papers is showed what might have been when different versions of her younger self appear as subsequent passengers in her cab.
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I can sense the makings of an interesting story. ?But ?it seems to me that stories facing forward in time with expectations of ?what ?might be are usually more effective and appealing than stories facing backwards in time with regrets about might have been.
Even when stories flashback or reference the past, the dramatic question is: ?what difference does it make? ?What changes as a result? (Drama is about change, not stasis.) ?What must the protagonist do going forward with her life? ?Consider Dickens’ “A Christmas Carol”. ?Why is it such an enduring and popular masterpiece? ?Because Ebenezer Scrooge’s is forced to see events in his past, about the life he might have lived if only he had chosen differently. The plot of the story is about what he must do in the future ?to redeem his past.
What is the destination of the plot of this premise? ?And what are the stakes? ?(Again, Dickens, his use of a stake character in “A Christmas Carol”: ?if Scrooge doesn’t reform his ways, Tiny Tim will ?die.)
Suffice to say I’m intrigued by the idea but not exactly hooked — yet.
When first reading this I thought of A Christmas Carol as well. The plot in A Christmas Carol was really about how Scrooge wants to be left alone – this is his goal at first after the appearance of the first ghost, but this changes? (classic change of approach) after he goes through an ordeal.
Perhaps best to model this MC after Scrooge – give her a flaw that caused her to lose her first love and as she revisits the past she learns to get over the flaw to become a better person.
After her son’s marriage separation, a divorced taxi driver who is full of regret, sees what might have been from past failed relationships, and uses these visions to help repair her son’s marriage before it’s too late.