After her husband becomes ill, a young woman is forced to confront her guilt in the bowels of a religious sect.

    Penpusher Posted on October 9, 2019 in Horror.
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      Why does she feel guilty? Based on this logline, she’s done nothing wrong.

      The inciting incident and the goal must be connected. The I.I. upsets the balance in the protagonist’s life thus creating the goal to correct this imbalance. If the I.I. is her husband falling ill, then the goal should be something like curing him.

      What does someone being “forced to confront her guilt” look like on screen? Film is a visual medium after all. Who is forcing her to do anything and why?

      She’s a “young woman”. With a character description you reduce your protagonist to 2/3 words so it’s best to be as descriptive as possible whilst maintaining some relevance to the story you’re trying to tell. With that in mind, is describing her as a “young woman” the best way to tell the reader who your protagonist really is?

      The protagonist must be proactive. They should be pushing the story forward, not being pulled through it by things outside their control. What is your protagonist doing that’s proactive?

      Currently, I don’t understand the purpose of the religious sect. Are they benevolent or malevolent? What is their stake in this?

      At the moment, I feel like there’s a disconnect between all the elements. Maybe try using the generator to help with this. It’s a really handy tool for ensuring that all the elements are there and link together.

      Summitry Answered on October 10, 2019.
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        What does, “Forced to confront guilt” look like on the screen?

        How is this forced upon her by the cult and what are the consequences if she rejects being forced to confront her guilt?

        Will the cult do something bad to her? If so, what is the specific threat to the lead character?

        Singularity Answered on October 10, 2019.
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          As the others said.  And since the story is cast as a horror flick, what is there about being in the “bowels of a religious cult” that makes it horrible?

          Singularity Answered on October 10, 2019.
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