mikefairbPenpusher Posted: July 1, 20202020-07-01T17:36:01+10:00 2020-07-01T17:36:01+10:00In: Short FilmAfter killing her abusive husband, a desperate woman avoids detection by destroying the evidence, will this clandestine, gory and surreal mother-daughter journey be exposed by the ex-cop next door?Liquid and Dust ShareFacebook3 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentRichiev 61 Loglines 3,413 Reviews 307 Best Reviews 81,445 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2020-07-01T17:49:16+10:00Added an answer on July 1, 2020 at 5:49 pm It would probably be good to avoid having questions in a logline“When she kills her husband after discovering he abused their daughter, a desperate mother must hide the evidence to avoid discovery by her husband’s best friend; their ex-cop neighbor.”3 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppGeorge Tsounis 1 Loglines 2 Reviews 0 Best Reviews 24 Points View Profile George Tsounis Penpusher 2020-07-08T11:40:36+10:00Added an answer on July 8, 2020 at 11:40 am You should avoid leaving a logline open ended, and stick closer to the intended formula of a logline, for example using when, A, must0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppCraigDGriffiths firstname.lastname@example.org 70 Loglines 999 Reviews 105 Best Reviews 20,402 Points View Profile CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter email@example.com 2020-07-02T12:32:29+10:00Added an answer on July 2, 2020 at 12:32 pm Are they on the run and he is a new neighbour? Did they kill him and hide the body? Did she kill him and make it look like an accident? These are all parts that I sort of need. What is the relationship with the neighbour?After disguising killing her husband as a home invasion a wife and daughter must…. after her ex-cop neighbour start making his own enquires.Disguising the murder of her abusive husband as natural causes a mother and daughter come under the eye of their ex-cop neighbour forcing them to …… so ……That sort of thing.0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to can add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?