After looking in a bewitched mirror, a schizofrenic superhero suffering from anterograde amnesia must defeat her super vilan alterego in ten nightmares in order to not wake up as evil reincarnated.

    Rutger Oosterhoff Samurai Asked on January 12, 2018 in Horror.

    Yep, just a little too much going on here. If he is a Superhero who discovers his greatest villain is himself then focus on that that rest seems like they could be different stories

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      This is confusing.

      The MC is a schizophrenic, a superhero, and an anterograde amnesiac (had to look that one up just to understand what it means) – which one is the MC’s defining characteristic?

      On top of the MC’s description being convoluted, the fantasy/supernatural genre lacks specificity – it involves superheroes, magic, and demonic elements.

      I suggest you pick the one most appropriate description for the MC, and narrow down the genre to the most relevant such as; angels and demons (Constantine), magic (Harry Potter) or plain old (fill-the-gap) super-hero guff.

      Nir Shelter Singularity Reviewed on January 12, 2018.
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        You may have thrown just a few too many elements into your cocktail.

        Richiev Singularity Reviewed on January 12, 2018.

        Ditto.

        on January 12, 2018.

        super jumbo mumbo (from Blake Snyder’s save the cat) came to mind

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          Rutger,

          Wouldn’t you want to build up your hero within a normal world first before you throw all these mental obstacles for him/her to conquer first?

          The good side is that you have established a worthwhile goal already. Just nothing specific about the hero.

          Foxtrot25 Summitry Reviewed on January 12, 2018.
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