After losing her arm in a car accident, a prodigious but reckless chef reconciles with her ill father, who encourages her to seek redemption and forgiveness.
Redemption and forgiveness for what?
I like the idea of a skilled chef losing her arm so is unable to do what she is good at but, for me, the goal should then be overcoming this adversity. It’s a physical disability and an emotional journey. The journey should be physical too BUT through that she goes on an emotional one.
I feel like what we’ve got so far is the first act only. I want to know what she’s going to do next.
Act I should be she is already a highly skilled chef, she’s a hard ass, and isn’t well liked. Much quicker and you don’t have to worry about cramming her rise to where she is in 30mins. Chances are, before she was a great chef, she wasn’t quite as “hard-ass” and was more liked by those around her and it’s the nature of her desire to succeed that she pushed all those things aside to get to where she is. If the audience sees what she was like before she became the great chef, there’s a chance that where she ends up at the end will have less of an impact because the audience will have seen that she can be a better person already. Does that make any sense at all?
I think she should be attending meetings in act II as this is where you’re going to meet the additional characters who provide the different perspectives on her point of view. Act II is all about her fighting between who she was and who she is and there needs to be people who represent both sides of this in her life – past and future – Father and fellow disabled person. As I mentioned before, through one of these characters (the B-Story) she has a turning point that pushes the story into Act III.
You’ve got an interesting 1st Act , the accident and loss that triggers her crisis. And I like the 3rd Act resolution.
But loglines are not about 3rd Acts. Loglines should never contain a spoiler, how the protagonist solves her dramatic problem. So that leaves the 2nd Act , fully half the film, where “she hits rock bottom”. Well, how exciting or interesting will that be to watch? What distinguishes her descent to a “rock bottom” from all the other descents in all the other films about characters facing traumatic adversity?
I agree with mikepdley85. Introduce her at the top of her game, the peak of her career. And arrogant and difficult to work with. She’s know how to cook, but not how deal with mere humans who “crippled” by an inability to perform up to her standards. (Thus establishing the contrast for the 3rd Act redemptive solution.)
And then because of reckless hubris…
About the 3rd Act: It seems to me that it would be a more dramatically effective reconciliation if she’s not the beneficiary of his will. Because the father doesn’t die Rather he remains alive and stakes her. He demonstrates his love for her and his faith in her talent by cashing out the last of his IRA savings. But that it isn’t enough. for her to start anew. So he mortgages his home. In the closing scene, she serves him his favorite dish and he raises a toast to her recovery and their reconciliation. (Bringing closure to a backstory issue: he’s never dined in one of her restaurants before.)
>>Emotionally she is disabled and only by becoming physically disabled does she become emotionally able.
Bingo! Spot on!
And if the dad divorced his mother for her drug abuse, then shouldn’t he refuse to take his daughter in for the same reason in Act 2. She’s turned out to be no better than her mother.
Which would intensify the emotional catharsis of his Act 3 reversal and act of reconciliation.
A prodigious chef falls off the tracks after losing her arm in a car accident. At rock bottom, she finds redemption by setting up a restaurant that only employs people with disabilities.
That’s the full start to end, with reconciliation with parents and former friends thrown into the mix.
Yeah basically, Act 1 is her becoming a prodigal chef, until she loses her arm.
Act 2 is her trying and failing to come to terms with that, losing her restaurants etc unable to accept it spiralling in to alcohol abuse, she moves back home with her father.
Act 3 is her redemption, begins cooking for fun, attending meetings, opens a new restaurant.
A prodigal chef loses her arm in a car accident – unable to come to terms with being unable to cook to her former standards, she moves back home with her father but finds a chance at redemption.