NadsLogliner Asked: February 11, 20202020-02-11T02:06:53+10:00 2020-02-11T02:06:53+10:00In: AdventureAfter losing her pilot training scholarship, a dorky girl joins forces with a group of air hostesses to help them smuggle blood diamonds from Sierra Leone.– ShareFacebook4 ReviewsVotedOldestRecentNads 6 Loglines 4 Reviews 0 Best Reviews 186 Points View Profile Nads Logliner 2020-02-11T02:09:45+10:00Added an answer on February 11, 2020 at 2:09 am Set in the 2000’s, during the Sierra Leone civil war. The girl loses her scholarship funding because of the effect 9/11 has on the aviation industry. Her goal is to become a pilot. She becomes involved in smuggling diamonds to fund her expensive tuition. It is also a fish-out-of-the-water story because she is a dorky tomboy who joins forces with glamorous air hostesses.Title: Diamond in the Rough0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 64 Loglines 3,558 Reviews 309 Best Reviews 82,056 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2020-02-11T10:48:43+10:00Added an answer on February 11, 2020 at 10:48 am The transition is a bit abrupt, Going from a dorky girl losing a scholarship, to smuggling blood diamonds. There is a pretty big jump. your explanation does help the reader understand what is going on but the logline needs a smoother transition.However, I do like the idea. 0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppRichiev 64 Loglines 3,558 Reviews 309 Best Reviews 82,056 Points View Profile Richiev Singularity 2020-02-11T10:52:58+10:00Added an answer on February 11, 2020 at 10:52 am A story question. Does the Dorky girl fly the plane?I ask this because that would be really funny.She starts flight school, and loses her scholarship, Now she is back home and the smugglers learn she has some flight training so they convince her to fly their plane. But she only had part of her training so she is really bad. (Like she doesn’t really know how to land a plane)Anyway I like the concept0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppCraigDGriffiths email@example.com 74 Loglines 984 Reviews 104 Best Reviews 20,430 Points View Profile CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter firstname.lastname@example.org 2020-02-12T11:35:40+10:00Added an answer on February 12, 2020 at 11:35 am The story has little to do with her losing the scholarship. That could be a single line of dialogue. To fund her tuition to become a pilot a girl teams with a group of hostesses to smuggle diamonds but …. forcing them to …..0 Share ShareShare on FacebookShare on TwitterShare on LinkedInShare on WhatsAppYou must login to add an answer. Username or email* Password* Remember Me! Forgot Password?